What are the greatest strengths of your scene?
- I believe that the strongest part of my scene is the way in which I set up the emotion and concern for Abby by the other NCIS members. I also think that the way in which I "set the scene" for each action was developed well and aided in the establishment of imagery and emotion. After some discussion in peer groups, the members of my group said that I conveyed the urgency of the situation very well. They also said that I communicated the personalities of the characters well and simply, and it got the job done.
What makes you proud of this scene?
- Similar to the what I just mentioned, I am proud of the way I created emotion in the scene. I am proud of this because I know that as a reader, I enjoy being able to be emotionally connected to the characters. Some of my least favorite books are ones where I don't understand how the characters feel about a situation; there isn't that personal touch and character emotion that draws me in.
If you had time to re-write the scene, what would you do to improve it? Be specific.
- If I had to improve this scene in any way, I would spend more time on describing facial expressions and perhaps more time on the way the characters spoke amongst each other. I was quick to get the story moving along to get the characters to "save" Abby. I should have shown more inner emotion from the characters. After peer review, the members of my group were really stressing the fact that I should have included more dialogue to convey the message instead of using descriptors.
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